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Perfect

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"If only I was alluring."
She said looking into the mirror.
"If only I was fearless."
She muttered.
"If only,"
"I was flawless."
She swiftly leaves her room
Without a trace of confidence.

She takes a step on the sidewalk.
As she slowly takes a breath,
She begins to step off the sidewalk.
Her mind was completely dismissed of the thought of looking both ways.
A deadly mistake.

If she had been paying attention..
That car speeding near her
Wouldn't have been able to reach her.

She collapses to the ground
And closes her eyes.
This is it,
She thinks.
I'm gone.

She opens her eyes
To see a room full of furniture.
All of which was white.
The walls,
The furniture,
The floor.
She spots a man.

"Have I perished?"
She asks.
The man doesn't respond.
Instead he says,
"I will grant you one wish."

The girl is bewildered.
Not knowing what to say
She blurts out,
"I want to be perfect."

He does what she wants
And she becomes perfect.
He gives her a mirror
But she looks the same.
She feels the same too.
What's going on?!

"You tricked me!"
She shrieked.
"You said you'd make me flawless!"

"I didn't trick you."
The man said simply.
"You silly girl."
"You were already perfect."

"What?"
She asks in a daze.

"You expected too much of yourself."
"You may not be the most beautiful girl in the world,"
"You may not be the most brilliant girl in the world,"
"And you may not be the kindest girl in the world,"
"But you are you."
"And that's all that matters."

The girl looks at him.
Not knowing what to say
She closes her eyes.

She wakes up
To be in the hospital.
Startled,
She stood up.

She looks in a mirror
And sees her old self.

"Now I get it."
She whispers.
"The only person I wasn't perfect to…"

"Was myself."
This is basically a story in a poem. No it is not real, but I felt like writing it. :)
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MagicalJoey's avatar
Good day,
I am from GrammarNaziCritiques , a group to which you have posted this piece as part of our favourites folder. The pieces in the favourites folder do not receive critique at all, and shouldn't by rights be there as we are not a 'promotion of pieces' group but rather a functioning critique group. I am removing the work from the folder, but I'd like to encourage you to submit it for critique into our 'poetry for critique' folder.
Sorry for the confusion, especially if you have been waiting for critique on this piece and have not received it as of yet.
Regards,
Jo
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